Go proofread my new website

Gonna kick your ass if the thing I told you about is still there...
 
You need to get someone to proof read your story because the grammar is horrible. First paragraph is one run on sentence.

Several years ago I got tired of wearing a belt with a metal buckle that chipped paint on my classic cars, left creases in my expanding beer belly, rusted because us fat boys sweat a little bit more, chipped the finish off of the bedroom floor at night, set off the metal detector at airports, and became entangled in my climbing harness when I was scaling the north slope of Mt. McKinley.
 
You need to get someone to proof read your story because the grammar is horrible. First paragraph is one run on sentence.

Several years ago I got tired of wearing a belt with a metal buckle that chipped paint on my classic cars, left creases in my expanding beer belly, rusted because us fat boys sweat a little bit more, chipped the finish off of the bedroom floor at night, set off the metal detector at airports, and became entangled in my climbing harness when I was scaling the north slope of Mt. McKinley.
Have you ever talked or read anything else fr me? That is me.
 
For some reason the pictures on the creations by curt are dark but when you click on the pictures it goes to a new page and they are bright. You can't really see them very well dark.

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Sorry if you get upset just pointing things out that help me want to go back to websites. I'm on my phone so it's your mobile site. When you click menu the alignment of the text is off just a bit.

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Nice website and product. I agree with cowboy, use periods more and commas less.
On the returns page, the box of text moves but the words don't which means you can only read half of what is written.
Good luck!
 
Very functional, very well-done website. Everything I've visited worked well and responded quickly. Kudos, Fools! :)
 
Have you ever talked or read anything else fr me? That is me.

I haven't but your putting this out there for the world. It's not really you speaking but your story. It makes it easier for people to read. If you want or need I can get my wife to read it and punctuate it for you.
 
One suggestion from me....when i click from a phone to the next picture when they rotate at the top...i see the name of the pic in white on bottome left. Img_788 or 1209887fatboy.img or something. It looks cleaner and more polished when those names arent tagged to the pic
 
What was the thing? Curt probably never told Lindsey about it

It was in the area that mentioned pickups instead of shipping. I don't remember the exact wording that needed fixing but that option doesnt seem to be around any longer so.. no doubt Curt forgot and it's just a coincidence. :D
 
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Should be fixed. It changed depending on whether it was in the mobile or desktop site

Everything I saw was mobile. Again my offer to have my wife make the paragraph flow is always open. She can make it read better and say the same thing.
 
Oh, so I see you went with WIX. How was your experience? Would you recommend it over (whatever you were using)?
Only Lulu can answer that question. She handles all that & more. If it wasn't for her TFLG wouldn't be.
We were on Squarespace before. I gather from her that Wix has a lot more & better features.
 
Everything I saw was mobile. Again my offer to have my wife make the paragraph flow is always open. She can make it read better and say the same thing.
Lulu suggested this when I wrote this for the other site & I voted it down. My highest finished grade in school was 8th so I figured that was closer to my real life persona. But I'm open to it being highbrowed.:D:p
 
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You need to get someone to proof read your story because the grammar is horrible. First paragraph is one run on sentence.

Several years ago I got tired of wearing a belt with a metal buckle that chipped paint on my classic cars, left creases in my expanding beer belly, rusted because us fat boys sweat a little bit more, chipped the finish off of the bedroom floor at night, set off the metal detector at airports, and became entangled in my climbing harness when I was scaling the north slope of Mt. McKinley.
Come sit in The Gun Room tomorrow and Listen to him...that sentence sounds Just like him. At a lower volume.
 
Oh, so I see you went with WIX. How was your experience? Would you recommend it over (whatever you were using)?
We were with squarespace before which we never had major issues with. Customer service was helpful. But we had limitations on what we were doing. Wix offered 50% off for a year and we knew someone that was happy with it. So far adding our products has been MUCH easier (aside from a few hiccups) and we have a lot more options than we did with squarespace (this is Lulu by the way, Fool#2 doesn’t have a clue about the website stuff. On second thought neither does Fool #1 ‍)
 
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